In my essay on student tracking, my original thesis was "Unfair and unchallenging remedial classes created for tracking are not pushing students to their fullest potential". This thesis was too broad and would have taken longer to explain and my essay would have been more difficult to write. First, I should have defined “remedial classes” since that is a euphemism and “remedial classes” have different expectations depending on the school. Secondly, “don't push students” is too obvious and I should also explain why this is bad, why we are not pushing students enough and what exactly it means. After researching the “why,” I discovered the huge disproportion between minorities and whites in science and math careers. From this, I was able to use a very specific problem as the focus of my essay. I was able to eliminate many notes by excluding the ones that didn't apply